Avery Allred Portfolio

This is my final draft of my music argument The Beatles vs. The Rolling Stones. I edited the unfortunate misuse of in-text citations once again. I also made the opening paragraph much shorter. Making the opening paragraph shorter was extremely hard for me! As I mentioned previously in the last post I am a big geek when it comes to music. When I started writing this essay the opening paragraph was almost the length of a football field. Okay, I am being dramatic but it was over two pages long! I finally condensed it to one page. Which I understand is still very long for an opening paragraph. However, I felt like an obsessive music listener that everyone needed as much background information on the topic than they actually needed! With all that being said here is my edited final draft. 

This time I did things differently. I learned a new technique called TREX which stands for thesis, reasons, evidence, and explanation. I came up with three things for each thing. This was a very helpful way of prepping for an essay. I was able to online and have notes in a very organized way. However, I think I like the way I normally organize my essay. It may be because I have been doing it the same way since I learned to write an essay. Nonetheless, I will be incorporating this method into my own in the future. As you can see I also decided to try and take all my notes and outlines on Microsoft One Note to go paperless. T-REX Outline My Assignment #3 topic is this argument: The Beatles is the greatest rock ‘n roll band, not The Rolling Stones.   T (Thesis):  The Beatles are a more legendary rock band than The Rolling Stones because The Beatles are the most innovative, inspiring, and everlasting...

Here is the final draft of Outdoor Voices Ad Analysis.

Outdoor Voices Ad For my second assignment in English Composition 1, I had to write an ad analysis essay. After looking hard and long I found this ad. I decided to choose this ad because it shows ethos, pathos, and logos. I also am a big fan of the company. This is the perfect ad also because of the wording that is on the image. Here are my first outlines for the essay. It also includes some notes and ideas on what I could write about for each paragraph. I always start out with the mindset that I am going to write five paragraphs. The first paragraph is the opening that features the thesis statement. The second, third, and fourth paragraphs in the body. The fifth paragraph is the closing I usually begin it with a revised version of the thesis statement from the first paragraph. I also make sure to touch everything that I have talked about in each paragraph in the fifth one to make sure I can have a complete closing. Page 1 of 2 Outline.  Page 2 of ...

Here is my "Where I'm From" narrative for my English Composition 1 class. It is about a coffee shop and the people in it that made an impact in my life. This establishment and the people within it helped shape the person I am today. Just by having conversations with friends over a cup of coffee.

Notes For "Where I'm From" Narrative Here are my frightful rough notes for my first assignment for English Composition 1.  The essay prompt was "Where I'm From." I started out by answering some questions that my professor provided for us. When writing an essay it tends to be organized chaos as you can see.  I am all over the place. I like to write anything and everything that comes to mind. What I have learned about writing is that I need to write anything I can think of down. When I am taking notes I am never thinking about if I am writing anything of substance. But instead just trying to get the ball rolling. I started out thinking narrowly. I thought about writing about where I have lived my entire life but decided that it would be too predictable and mainstream. Then I thought about where I grew up in the summers. However, writing about Maine didn't feel right. Then after several awful ideas and notes, I found my topic. I decided to write about ...